REVISING POEMS

 

As you look over your poem think about the following :

 

¨   Are my SENSORY IMAGES clear?  Do they need to be sharper or more specific?

(not “the beautiful tree next to me”  but:  a white blossoming plum

               not “I hear birds in the trees”  but: “the crow’s harsh cry cuts across the wren’s song”)

 

¨   Have I changed every general noun into a SPECIFIC one? (not “trees,” but “hemlocks”)

 

¨   Can I CUT out unnecessary words or phrases?  Get rid of clichés or overused words?

( “blanket of snow”  “babbling brook”  “beautiful sunset” )

 

¨   Have I used lots of SOUND elements like alliteration, assonance, half rhyme, etc.?

(Read the poem ALOUD several times for this one!)

 

¨   Is my FIRST LINE as interesting as it could be? (A sensory image, a metaphor, or an action is a good way to begin)

 

¨   Is my LAST LINE a strong one too ? (an image or action is usually effective – do not write a summing up line like in an essay!)

 

¨   Would REARRANGING lines bring more energy to the poem?

 

¨   Is the FORM of the poem the best for its subject?  (Stanzas, couplets, shape on the page?)

 

¨   Are the LINEBREAKS the best they could be?  (see the back of this page for more ideas)

 

¨   Does the poem have the best TITLE? (A perfect title can help cut poems "down to size" and make them sharper, more focused.)

 

 

A FEW TECHNIQUES TO TRY:

 

**Rewrite the poem without looking at the original version.  Let yourself go off in a new direction.  Then see if you have new material to include!

 

**Try reading the poem from the last line back up to the first.  Does it spark new ideas or more interesting images?

 

**Rearrange the poem with the last section first, the first in the middle, and the middle last----what happens?